I stand in a valley surrounded
By hills and trees mounted
The sun shines on the opposite hemisphere
And the moon can be seen nowhere
In an ocean of dark
I see things pointed like a shark
The rustling leaves make a sound so shrill
My spine shivers with the stormy wind’s chill
The pupil is maximized but still
Unable to get the light to fill
Black shapes appear on canvas black
A cricket chirps and animates the pack
Slowly the dawn breaks and
The black canvas gets a red band
The black sharks now lush green
The misty mountains so serene
The fear of unknown scared
Of knowledge making it impaired
The cool winds kiss the ears and whisper
The blindness, not the scene, is the one to whimper
And the sun shines after every dark night.
Beautiful imagery you painted through your words.
Kind Regards,
-Naima
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Yes Naima! No matter how much dark it gets, or how many clouds try to hide the Sun. Sooner or later the sunshine does come to our lives. π
Thank you so much for appreciating the imagery. It was a ‘fear’ whether I would be able to paint it satisfactorily π
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… wonderful poems to describe an image, well done!
greeting from Lis
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Thank you so much for appreciating, Lis! Your words really do wonders to the confidence of a budding writer like me. Lots of love from Prateek π
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… I like how you write and it is also like other people.
You bring with much feeling, stick to it
It greets you (here in Austria is just past midnight) π …Lis
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Thank you so much for the lovely encouraging words, my friend. Your comments really mean a lot to me π
Sending greetings for a beautiful Sunday π
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Thanks π
have nice Sunday
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Loved the image of a maximised pupil. Haunting!
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Glad to know that you loved it, Yusra, I’ll take it as a compliment π
It is really amazing to be appreciated for imagery by someone who is magical with them. π (your ‘conversation with a spider’ was really a piece of beautiful art) π
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Oh, you should definitely take it as a compliment! I meant it as such π You are very welcome. π
And thank you so much for the wonderful kind words about my imagery. I am nothing that special, but you are very generous π It means a lot to me that you enjoyed my work. Thanks so much for reading and for being so nice about it! π
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It is always a pleasure to read your works! You are really a very special writer and your gentle thoughts tell that you are a wonderful soul too. Have a great day ahead π
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Thank you, Prateek! π You have a great day too.
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Oh wow ! This one is beautiful !
Loved the play of imagery !
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Thank you so much for appreciating, purrfectgirl! It feels really amazing to know that my attempts are appreciated by someone who is so good with words. More than glad to know that you loved it ^_^
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Purrfect Girl? π
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I just painted it in my mind! Yet another beautiful poem, Prateek. Loved the last stanza the most π
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Thank you so much, Kritika! I can now call the poem a successful one. π
I have this funny fear of being alone in a valley at night, when the lights go out (happened 2 years back). But this is what happens in life – we are scared of things which we later realize were the most beautiful ones π
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I totally agree with that.
And it is near to magic when fear becomes your love.
I love beaches, but I fear being alone on an island, hearing roar of sea at night.
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Oh yes! The roaring sea also does the same. Nature indeed has the potential to bring out our strongest feelings π
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Precisely to say π
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Sorry, I don’t know how my comment appeared thrice.
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Haha, God bless our internet. Has happened with me too. But I’ll assume you showered thrice the love π
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What a positive perspective! π
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Wonderful imagery…. loved it… π
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Thank you so much for appreciating, ma’am! Your kind words really mean a lot π
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‘Black shapes appearing on canvas black’. Respect. Beautifully done!
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Aditi !! You are back ! Thank you so so much!! ^_^
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Had I gone anywhere? π The schedules are killing me. I have so much to write about, but no time at all!
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Haha I understand. I wish you are able to take some time out soon! Waiting to peek in your observations π
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Your excitement is infectious! π
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Well I am usually the laziest person in any group. So it is wonderful to hear that π
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Haha! Why do I find that hard to believe?
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Wow! Beauty of nature and what is fear in front of that? After darkness comes the day, a day so bright, suffice to elude fright. π Lovely poem Prateek, inspiring and filled with positivity! It put a smile on my face. π
Best wishes for your exams π I hope you got my nomination for Liebster!
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Wow ! You got the idea and summarized it so wonderfully! Thank you so much for your insightful and beautiful comment, Shambhavi. The poem now feels lucky to share a smile with you ^_^
And thank you for your wishes too, and yes I got it now. Already thinking and introspecting π
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Haha π I am more than happy to read your posts. They cheer me up. π
Go back to your studies -_- Should I ask you questions? Okay what is the topic? 0.0
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Haha yes yes I have to go. Passing respectfully in the last exams of college is quite important π
And topic is something related to steroids, not sure π
Have a good night π
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Lol π okie. Do well. Corticosteroids ah. Don’t worry, give your best God will do the rest!
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I’m liking your blog π keep it up! I have nominated you for an award https://thosehappythoughts.wordpress.com/2015/04/19/versatile-award-%f0%9f%92/ π x
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Thank you so so much Sophie !! Its an honored to be considered for this award by such a sparkling and cheerful writer !! Will do it as soon as my exams get over (tomorrow π )
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The fear of the night! π
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Yes, William. The fear of the unknown π
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Hey,I nominated you for the Versatile Blogger Award.:)
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Thank you so much for considering me !! I am really honored ! ^_^
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I’m so sorry,I figured out later you’ve already been nominated.:)
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Hehe I am obliged that you considered me and commented to let me know. It made a rough day very sweet π
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Hahaha..I’m so glad.:)
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You selection of words is amazing and so is ‘the blindness’.! No need of a picture, the lines say it all. π
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Thanks Archita ! You are too kind and generous with your appreciation ^_^
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Oh no, I just couldn’t stop myself saying that. π
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Flattered ^_^
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Oh, that’s ‘your’ as the first word.! π
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Cool winds are always sign of positivity !
The whole picture of the dawn and dusk in fictional yet splendid took me by surprise! I had to read this a lot to get the idea of how it felt! π
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Hehe yes Izza. Nature near mountains is beautiful and scary at different times. The feeling is really complex to fathom π
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Yeah you are right! One can’t figure out or mock the pain other endures. Though I made an irrelevant comment but just wanted it to fit in..Hahah:p
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Whatever comes from the heart is always welcome π What you said is very true. But still I feel that although we usually get irritated with those who still advise us without understanding the pain, but that irritation somehow sometimes helps us to momentarily forget our pain π
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True that…that happens and yeah you are observant with emotions. .good. .God bless! Keep writing awesome π
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