The Thin Line

He gave them an adrenaline rush,
Took them to mountains and to fields lush.
He was a guide, taught them well,
Known as adventure, took them to heaven from hell.

He, on the other hand was just a fraud,
Pretending to be him, he became their God.
Adopted and preached by the pop culture,
He was foolishness, impersonating as adventure.

The two religions, with uneven believers,
Fought for supremacy, increased their followers.
Judged each other, called pussies and fools,
The thin line in between, visible only to jewels.

They took care, but in turn feared,
They, unaware of fear, never cared.
When the eyesight is lost, the line is seen,
But time and our host, can really be mean.

A moment of fun, transformed in a split second,
To a lifetime’s ordeal, the stars beckoned.
The others were sad, for the friends they had,
did what was cool, without thinking of the lives they rule.

Inspired from theΒ sad news that I got today.

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29 thoughts on “The Thin Line

    • Prateek Kohli May 1, 2015 / 3:41 am

      No William, I didn’t know him personally, but he was a batchmate and this happened at a place where I went a week before.

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      • AdiC May 1, 2015 / 3:53 am

        Aren’t we glad that you’re fine! And strong enough to not be swayed by mindless peer pressure.

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      • Prateek Kohli May 1, 2015 / 1:30 pm

        Yes we are, Aditi. I really look forward to see a person like you among the decision makers. Your strength and intellect shout that you are made for it πŸ™‚

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      • AdiC May 1, 2015 / 2:28 pm

        Prateek, I want that, you want that. A lot of us want that! But for that I have to clear these God forsaken exams and they’re just burying me under pressure! I wish my strength and intellect were all that was required!

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      • Prateek Kohli May 1, 2015 / 2:33 pm

        Hehe calm down. Pressure is something that transforms coal into diamond. Just imagine what wonders it would do to a diamond πŸ˜‰

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      • AdiC May 1, 2015 / 2:34 pm

        Ahh… Diamonds and you! What was I? Kohinoor, huh?

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      • Prateek Kohli May 1, 2015 / 2:35 pm

        Yup but I forgot the British analogy now xD

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      • AdiC May 1, 2015 / 2:37 pm

        Haha! I’ll forgive you πŸ˜‰ You have a lot going on in your mind lately as it is!

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      • AdiC May 1, 2015 / 2:43 pm

        Which reminds me I am yet to watch the Shawshank Redemption! 4 months of the year are over and the easiest of the NY resolutions is still pending :/

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  1. AdiC May 1, 2015 / 2:11 am

    And now you would know why I particularly abhor the phrase ‘darr ke aage jeet hai’. Another life lost the same bloody way.
    You’ve captured the essence wonderfully. Take care. Don’t let it bring you down any more than necessary.

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  2. izza ifzaal May 1, 2015 / 9:02 am

    this was good and I have seen such things happening. From start till the end your poem was very well expressed and explained πŸ™‚ Take care πŸ™‚

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    • Prateek Kohli May 1, 2015 / 1:25 pm

      Thank you Izza. It’s good to be back on wordpress and read your lovely words. πŸ™‚
      Have a great weekend πŸ™‚

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  3. barrira May 1, 2015 / 9:04 am

    This is sad, meaningless competition and fun, so many lives are lost that way.
    Every now and then, I hear similar stories in news and it breaks my heart. Every person who leaves us, leaves behind a void that is never filled but the worst voids are the ones that come without a warning or a goodbye </3
    You penned it beautifully, Prateek. I hope you're okay though.
    Best
    B

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    • Prateek Kohli May 1, 2015 / 1:27 pm

      You are absolutely right, Barrira. All the plans and dreams can get shattered by just a moment of carelessness. I hope people learn from incidents like these.
      And I am okay, my friend. Your concern is appreciated πŸ™‚

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      • barrira May 1, 2015 / 2:35 pm

        Life is fragile.
        Glad you’re ok πŸ™‚

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  4. Kritika Vashist May 1, 2015 / 10:59 am

    A similar incident had happened months back with students of Hyderabad. The way your poem has been crafted reflects the causes and sadness. I wish people learn the lesson and do not take a challenge above their life, which is connected to so many other lives.

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    • Prateek Kohli May 1, 2015 / 1:36 pm

      I completely agree with this and wrote the same words a few minutes back in a comment. You are absolutely right, Kritika. I too just hope that people learn to value their lives.

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  5. Ushosee May 1, 2015 / 7:35 pm

    People are often driven into extreme measures. For fitting in. For getting validation from outside. I wonder how such insecurities go unchecked for years till a young life is cut short and it’s too late. Beautifully expressed. Peace to the departed life and prayers for those left behind.

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    • Prateek Kohli May 1, 2015 / 7:43 pm

      Yes, Ushosee! It is deceivingly dangerous when insecurities of present get the better of consequences of the future. Let’s remember him every time we feel week or our resistance wobbling.
      Also, thank you for appreciating. It’s great to see you here πŸ™‚

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  6. payalgajbhiye May 2, 2015 / 9:10 am

    you have awesome poetic skills and each and every word is filled with deep meaning….great job prateek

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    • Prateek Kohli May 2, 2015 / 10:00 pm

      Your words make my day, Payal and you are one of those people whose thoughts I really look forward to know. ^_^ Thank you for being so encouraging πŸ™‚

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  7. shambhavi31 May 3, 2015 / 9:06 pm

    Hey there! I hope you’re okay?!
    I can relate to this very well, some people don’t understand or rather pretend!
    They act so innocent and we continue to trust them, an accessory to their hopeless one of a million face. There are times we are left guessing and second guessing oureselves to discover how we fell off the hill. Such people don’t deserve our friendship. I just shifted to this new hostel and here my roommate is so dominating, she actually wants me to be her verbally controlled robot ‘:(
    I guess we need to draw boundaries and stay away from this overpowering people with no foundation.

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    • Prateek Kohli May 3, 2015 / 9:12 pm

      You are absolutely right, Shambhavi. Its easy to say and hard to implement, but sometimes that is the need of the hour.
      We have to realize that we can’t keep everyone happy and neither do we need to. The boundaries you talked about are very essential and I am sure you’ll be able to draw them no matter how much your roommate tries to resist it.
      And you do know that the smile suits you much more than that expression right? πŸ˜‰

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