Evening blues


As the sun sets and it’s time to go home
A strange figure moves at the horizon
Its spectacles reflected the dying light
As the creature drank the water from the sea

Suddenly my eyes open and I see around
Moon has risen, highway still jammed
Around 7-8 people more in the bus
Expressing the frustration in their own ways

I see a lady with reddish brown hair
Communicating her inability to fly to someone concerned
A man with a moustache thicker than his arm
Murmuring best wishes for everyone who’s on road

A young man with a French cut
Staring at infinity and lost in its beauty
There’s also the conductor for whom keeping his sleepy eyes open
Is as easy as completing a marathon with a bun in the oven

There, I hear a slap from an elderly woman to her child
The favorite way of venting out by parents
And of course, the guy of my age sitting beside me
Reading what I write, scared of this creepy sight

Oh, the traffic moved!
The gush of air and the moods soothed.


15 thoughts on “Evening blues

  1. AdiC January 27, 2016 / 3:40 pm

    This is a brilliant use and expression of traveling time 😉

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    • Prateek Kohli January 27, 2016 / 5:18 pm

      Thank you Amanda! I came back here after months and had a lot to catch up. Read your Christmas post, I hope things are going well now! And I missed the eeee’s 😉

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  2. annamist January 27, 2016 / 7:34 pm

    You’re brilliant with words. Amazing use of imagery.

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    • Prateek Kohli January 27, 2016 / 10:52 pm

      Thank you so much for visiting and the appreciation! Hope to see you again here 😃

      Liked by 1 person

  3. milliethom January 31, 2016 / 7:49 pm

    Clever and well detailed observations, Prateek. There’s nothing like a bit of ‘people watching’ to fuel the imagination. You’ve painted the overall scene very well, too. I can really ‘see’ the jammed highway and crowded bus, the setting sun and the rising moon. 🙂

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    • Prateek Kohli February 1, 2016 / 12:19 am

      Thank you for the wonderful words, Millie. It is good to see that our thoughts resonate about people watching. Particularly when nothing outside the bus is moving, the eyes have to rely on the indoors for some fun 😀

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      • milliethom February 2, 2016 / 6:20 pm

        Many writers have written about the importance of ‘people watching’ for character ideas. People are all fascinating, as your post showed! 🙂


  4. Jennifer Juneau February 13, 2016 / 3:47 am

    What a lovely post, I enjoyed every word 🙂 Thank you for liking my blog it’s nice to meet you.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Diwata February 15, 2016 / 5:46 am

    I very much like the flow of this. “A man with a moustache thicker than his arm” – really, I laughed at this part. Enjoy this 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    • Prateek Kohli February 21, 2016 / 7:05 pm

      The destiny of the post is fulfilled if it made you laugh, Diwata. Thank you so much 🙂


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